Please read this... and tell me what you think...?

OH MY GOD!! this sounds so good and very interesting. But i think you have one mistake or it can just be that i am wrong but in paragraph 6 line 3 you wrote smelt instead of smelled but then again i think i am wrong. but other than that it is like perfect. I really want to know the story and read it that's if you are writing a book. if you are good job and keep up the good work. and if it is an essay of some sort it still sounds good.